Hanging from the tree house railing, impatiens swing in the breeze. His mother, standing at the edge of the pine needles, discovered the bones of a child wrapped in a pink blanket.
The Trifextra weekend challenge was to choose 33 words from a single page in Elizabeth Strout’s “Olive Kitteridge,” and reshape those words into a piece of (our) own.
Very creepy. And oh there are so many directions you could take that short snippet. I want to follow that trail through to the end. Loved it!
I have loved reading this, I didn’t do this exercise, I was in NYC on Saturday, but I couldn’t wait to read the ones you chose, you crafted and as always, you engage and then twist, leaving me gasping.
WOW.
Holy Mother of Elvis! That was good.
standing at the edge of the pine needles – love that bit
Wow, Tara..nice.
Sudden vision of impatiens turning into pink baby bones. Yikes, Tara!
Oh, so good. My heart lurched at the ending sentence. Liked how you used the sense of smell and touch. Excellent piece.
Beautifully done! Great story-telling in those 33 words. Creepy, but what a fantastic use of the prompt!
Oh this is really good. Creepy, but really good.
as sad as the message, it was very well-written, particularly the combination of the soothing imagery, then the unanticipated discovery.
vivid, terrifying, a nightmare!
Very vivid picture, then with the sock to the gut. Great job with this prompt!
So sad
Ohhh…poor kid & what a shocking discovery for the narrator’s mother!This is amazing writing Tara-loved it:-)
Oh my, heartbreaking and vivid!
Wow! You did really well with this one!
Great reformation of the available words. A vivid and sad tale.
oh, Tara! You went there.
good stuff!
Oh, sadness! Heartbreaking piece here, which makes the lovely photo haunting.
My goodness! Crushing…and I thought I was…… ah you artist you..you reached hard, and twisted inner senses there… you managed to create such impact, even with ‘other’ words…